This is an Instant Message conversation with my friend Dylan from Chapel hill, North Carolina. Dmaix17 is Dylan and I am Elbrando12.
elbrando12: whats up dylan
elbrando12: whats up dylan
dmaix17 is online.
dmaix17:
chillin watchin the unc clemson game
dmaix17:
whats are u doin
elbrando12: oh really whats the score
dmaix17:
80 82 clemson
dmaix17:
with 36 secs left
dmaix17:
oh my god
dmaix17:
its tied
elbrando12: damn
elbrando12: clemsons pretty good
dmaix17:
yea
elbrando12: that duke unc game sucked
dmaix17:
yea it was so gay
dmaix17:
it was cause we didnt have lawson
elbrando12: yea whats wrong with him
dmaix17:
he like sprained his ankle
elbrando12: he'll be better before the tournament wont he
dmaix17:
yea he should be
elbrando12: did you get crazy this weekend or what
dmaix17:
haha not at all
dmaix17:
i had a bunch of tests last week
dmaix17:
and smoked so much on friday
dmaix17:
and then last night i went to a movie and passed out
elbrando12: jeff and ben came down and chilled sat night was a little out of controll
elbrando12: yea i have a test monday
dmaix17:
nice
dmaix17:
yea i got a physics one this week
dmaix17:
but it shouldnt be to hard
dmaix17:
i played call of duty on live
elbrando12: im getting pretty sick of school not gonna lie
dmaix17:
yea its gay
dmaix17:
it was all intense
elbrando12: yea we should play its so fun
dmaix17:
i kept getting worked
dmaix17:
id try to do halo shit and just get run
elbrando12: ive been playing halo lately tho im a 44 in rumble pit now
dmaix17:
nice
dmaix17:
i went down to a 42
elbrando12: what were you
dmaix17:
a 43
dmaix17:
so nothing bad
elbrando12: nice
elbrando12: whats the score of the game
dmaix17:
84 84
dmaix17:
it went into ot
dmaix17:
245 left
elbrando12: didnt they go into overtime last time they played
dmaix17:
i think so
dmaix17:
elbrando12: hows north carolina weather
elbrando12: is it still hot
dmaix17:
its been so nice
dmaix17:
like sunny 60 degrees
elbrando12: its straight freezing here
dmaix17:
damn
dmaix17:
yea its been getting warmer here
elbrando12: what are you doin for spring break
dmaix17:
no idea
dmaix17:
whens urs again
elbrando12: uh hold on let me check
elbrando12: march 17-22
dmaix17:
mine starts march 7
dmaix17:
and classes start march 17
dmaix17:
its 90 90 with 30 secs left
dmaix17:
clemson ball
dmaix17:
now 2 seconds left unc ball
elbrando12: well?
dmaix17:
unc timeout
elbrando12: damn
dmaix17:
unc passed it in an called another timeout
dmaix17:
with 1.2 secs left
elbrando12: yea i just checked out my shit and i don't have any tests that week u have spring break but your thinking of coming out here after school right
dmaix17:
yea
dmaix17:
i might try to go for spring break to
dmaix17:
but im like 95 percent sure im coming after school
dmaix17:
it went into another ot
elbrando12: nice
elbrando12: well not nice i guess
elbrando12: but im gonna go
dmaix17:
alright take it easy
elbrando12: later
3 comments:
The black stripes got distracting and made it a little hard to read. I would keep the color the same but maybe increase the font size for the Dylan and get rid of the black.
If you're going to keep one person another color, maybe get rid of the names separating the speakers (typers). When it was read aloud, you didn't keep going back to the speaker names.
Otherwise, I thought it was interesting about how it went back to the game at the end. Makes me wonder how often we do that when speaking.
I like the idea of different colored text to differentiate the speaker from the quoted text, but that black and red is rough to read.
OK, you have a new media conversation, but what could you do the help the reader understand your message and the conversation. Well, first fix the colors. Also, IM makes it pretty clear who is speaking, so you are good there.
I suggest two things. First, how about some links to info about the games or teams. Perhaps some images of the place you are talking about visiting?
Second, and more important, you need to insert your meta voice into this. Some asides, explanations about the characters speaking, why this game or team matters to you, why you think school sucks or the game is "gay" would be very helpful to the reader and give you a chance to add some textual artistry to this conversation.
Think back to our original conversation and how important the asides were in the "traditional" piece that we read.
Maybe a little bit too long cause it's kind of boring for someone who doesn't follow or like basketball. I like how there's two conversations going on though. The black lines are definitely distracting for the reader so you might want to fix that, and when dmaix17 says something it goes below his IM name and when you say something it's straight across. I think if it was both like yours it would be easier to follow. But overall the conversation was easy to understand.
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